Curse

TwilightOblivion · Sep 21, 2005, 12:39 AM // 00:39

Unfortunately, i wrote that script in the mindset that 4 chars could party in presear, so im rewriting it to accomidate for the fact that it only can hold 2. Tur im gonna need the names of the Mo and R before i post the revised version, im gonna have names in it

Draco Hunt · Sep 21, 2005, 01:49 AM // 01:49

Actualy i would love to put up a site for this unfortunatly i suck at making 1 plus i dont have the right programs to do so.

Also i think the biggest problem is the talking becuase no they dont tilt there heads and no the dont use there mouths ever.

So its got to be in some kind of cutscene style or else it wont work.
Also timing with NPC enemies is hard to do i realy think we should do some general rehersals to get things running smoothly.
Also allot of the people who want to join on this project have to wait untill the presearing bit is over but i think all of us have enough patience for that.
Voice over is the key element of the humor and timing so we should realy do voice auditions.(I dont think i can be a voice because im not english or american and so i dont speak english natuaraly enough(i think))

Ok i just put all of the things that were on my mind here so please tell me what you have in mind for solutions and what you think of my ideas.

PS. We must make shure the movies dont last to long to keep the humor in people wouldnt like it if it became a drag.

Tur713 · Sep 21, 2005, 01:51 AM // 01:51

I have a version of a script with two characters already in the works. Don't worry I got it. I'll take your input and use some of your ideas okay?

Draco Hunt · Sep 21, 2005, 02:12 AM // 02:12

Where are you gonna post that script??? you could do it in this thread but i think we realy need a place of our own to start this from

TwilightOblivion · Sep 21, 2005, 02:16 AM // 02:16

actually im done, I broke that one huge episode int 3 smaller episodes, changing a bunch of things around. i even named the episodes. Here They Are. I churned these out in about 2 hours, not including the time it took to rewrite it to make sense. just think about it for a second. I can get about an episode for every hour i work on this! I think its safe to say that the story will be quite ahead of the filming. If only I had the names of the ranger and Monk i coulda changed it to have all the names.

Episode 1- “Bugs R Gross! Kitties R Pretty!”

Kael - Ah what a beautiful day, don’t you agree _____?
R - Indeed Kael, I haven’t seen it this calm for a while.
Kael - Hey, what that over there? Those damn worms are back again! Rock, paper, scissors to see who clears ‘em out?
R- Fine by me. Two outta three.
Kael&R- (in unison) Rock, paper, scissors! (Kael has rock and R has paper)
Villager - (distant cry) H-help! The worms are attacking! Please someone help!
Kael&R- (in unison) Rock, paper, scissors! (Both have scissors)
Kael&R- (in unison) Rock, paper, scissors! (Kael has paper and R has scissors)
Kael - Aww fuk.
R- Make it quick will you? I want to go hunting.
Kael - Fine whatever. (Kills the worms and returns to R)
R- Lets go, I want to use this spell I learned, it’s supposed to allow me to control animals.
Kael - I hope it works for your sake.
R- Whatever, I don’t care. Let’s just go already, I want to try out my new skill!
(Several hours later…)
R - We’ve been wandering for Melandru knows how long, and we still haven’t even found a Strider! Where could all of the animals gone?
Kael- But we did find this cool rune.
R- No, YOU found that rune. You wont even let me look at it.
Kael - (changing topics) So what kind of animal are you hoping to tame?
R - I don’t know. I was hoping for some kind of feline, why?
Kael - Because here is your chance good buddy, there’s a Melandru’s Stalker right there! (begins advancing and realizes R isn’t following) Hey are you coming?
R - There are several spiders with him. I don’t like spiders
Kael – (mocking) Is someone afraid of the big bad spiders?
R – They’re all creepy and gross with their fangs and all those long legs (shudders). Don’t even get me started on the webbing! I just know they want to eat me! Please don’t let them touch me!
Kael - I guess we will just have to get rid of them first.
R - But then we might scare off the stalker!
Kael – (sigh) Do you have a better idea?
R – Yes I do. You take out the spiders while I charm the Stalker. Cast firestorm and a few other spells to distract them while I charm from up here.
Kael - “Up here?” Where exactly am I going to be?
R- On the hill while I charm him.
Kael - You want me to risk my life so you can get your stupid pet? I don’t think so! I don’t love spiders either!

End Episode

Episode 2- “Wammo!”

Grunto - (distant cry) Please someone have mercy and help me!
Sven - Who is that? (Heads in direction of Grunto) I’d better go help him, it is my duty.
Grunto - Thank Balthazar, someone’s coming!
Sven - Im Sven Dwaynalight. Who the hell are you and what the hell are you doing?
Grunto - My name is Grunto Beastmasher, someday to be recorded in the annals of history! But at the moment I am in need of assistance!
(Sven casts a few spells to kill the enemies and heal W)
Grunto - I thought I was doomed! You saved my life, I am et-
Sven- (interrupting) What. The. Fuk. (Beginning to laugh as he speaks) You thought you were doomed?!? Most children can kill those things, and there were only a few attacking you. (Stifles laughter)
Grunto - I am n-no good at fighting.
Sven- That was kind of obvious from that display of your “fighting” technique you fuking pussy. What the hell are you doing out here anyway?
Grunto - I’m trying to retrieve some stolen goods for the Ascalonian Army.
Sven- Why the fuk would they send you? Furthermore, why the fuk would you join the army if you can’t fight?
Grunto - Well, the mission was my choice, and it was to try and hone my fighting skills. I jo-
Sven- (interrupting W) A lot of good that did
Grunto - (getting perturbed) As I was saying, I joined the army hoping to become a legend among warriors.
Sven - (stifling laughter) You are the “legend” who can’t fight, joined the army and takes on missions to hard for you to handle so random strangers must come save your ass. You are on your own from here.
Grunto - Wait! I cannot return home empty handed, but I also cannot get back the goods by myself. I beg of you, please help me.
Sven- Ummm, why would I help you?
Grunto- If you help, I’ll cut you in on the reward.
Sven- Reward?
Grunto- Yes, it’s a 30 platinum reward, so that would be 15 platinum each.
Sven- Sweeeet! Im in! Hold on, something doesn’t seem right. That’s a very large sum of money for such a simple task. What was stolen?
Grunto- Don’t know. When I asked to be briefed on mission details Sir Tidus…
(begin flashback)
Grunto- Sir Tidus, would you please brief me the details of this mission?
Sir Tidus- Sorry, that’s confidential.
Grunto- But if im to succeed with the mission, wont I need the details?
Sir Tidus- Sorry, that’s confidential.
Grunto- Is that all you can say?
Sir Tidus- Sorry, that’s confidential.
Grunto- Jeez, do you have to be such a tight ass all the time?
Sir Tidus- Sorry, that’s confidential.
(end flashback)
Sven- Ookaaayy… Whatever, it doesn’t matter. 15 platinum is serious cash, and is worth whatever this mission has in store.

End Episode

Episode 3- “Time to Dye!”

Sven-This is NOT worth 15 platinum. We’ve been searching for Dwayna knows how long, and we still haven’t found even a clue as to where to find these thieves. Hey, did Sir Tidus tell you who stole the “chest”?
Grunto-I told you already no, it was “confidential”.
Sven - If we did know, we would at least know where to look because thieves are territorial little bastards. Hey Grunto, do you know whose territory we are in right now?
Grunto – How should I know? Hey what’s that? (points toward a campsite)
Sven - (whispering) Get down! Hide! (analyzes enemy camp) Hey, what does this chest we’re looking for look like?
Grunto- Its supposed to be a brown wooden box. It looks just like every other chest.
Sven- They have one of those. Lets attack them while we still have the element of surprise.
Grunto - But if its just an ordinary chest, then how do we know that this is the one we’re-
Sven- Quiet, they will hear you!
Grunto - You’ve seen me fight haven’t you? How do you expect me to kill them?
Sven- Simple, I don’t even expect you to hurt them. I just want you to keep them from getting to me. I will be healing you the whole time.
Grunto - I-I… guess I c-can… do that…
Sven- Don’t be a baby, your armor is made of steel, you will be fine.
(both get into position for the ambush. Mo casts several smiting spells over the camp, Grunto just screams, charging at the camp.)
Grunto- (hysterical panting) Wow. We won!
Sven- I think that’s all of them
Grunto - Here’s the chest. (opens chest) Wh-What the-? Its just a bunch of dye! Why would they offer 30k for dye… I told you this wouldn’t be it.
Sven- Are you kidding? This is a goldmine! Every vial is filled with black dye!
Grunto- So?
Sven-Sooo black dye is worth about 8 platinum a vial, and there must be at least 20 vials here! We’re fuking rich!
Grunto - So we steal the dye?
Sven- I got a better idea. We replace the vials in the chest with vials of dark water that look like black dye. We then return to Ascalon City with chest in hand, return it for the reward, then sell the real dye for major profit! Its brilliant!
Grunto - And if were caught?
Sven- We blame it on the bandits.
Grunto - I wanted to become famous for heroic deeds, not villainous ones!
Sven- Considering your combat skills, thank your god that you aren’t famous for your blunderous deeds.
Grunto - (sighs) That’s pretty much inevitable though.
(A mysterious voice comes from the top of the hill)
? - I commend you on being able to take out this camp, but this time I fear you are greatly outnumbered.
(Enemies come from all directions)
Grunto - Wha-?
Sven- Fuk! Run!
? - Get them
(Sven, Grunto run, but are knocked out and captured.)
? - Good. Grab the chest and the bodies; I don’t want any information to be leaked about the whereabouts of this chest. Carry them back to the base, and quickly. Nothing can stop me now, unless of course someone comes looking for these two, but what’s the likely hood of THAT happening?

End Episode

Intriguing is it not? The next episode will be based upon Kael and the rangers battle with the spiders!

Tur713 · Sep 21, 2005, 02:24 AM // 02:24

I still want to show you guys my script, okay? We can vote then. Not to put you down or anything, but just because you can write a script quickly, doesn't neccesarily mean it's the best method. Have you looked at my descriptions yet or just read the names?

TwilightOblivion · Sep 21, 2005, 02:34 AM // 02:34

I read the descriptions, and i tried to fit them accordingly. just try to tie up the point your at in the script and post it. I wanna see what you can do. Also, please post the other characters. BTW i definately think the necro should be a chick. necro chicks are so much cooler.

EDIT i saw the edit and theres some good things there. I just need the rangers name to tie up the story.

Tur713 · Sep 21, 2005, 03:18 AM // 03:18

Sure we'll have a necro chick. I don't have much other characters planned so far because just these should carry us for quite some time. We'll see...

[After begining cutscene, not yet rewritten]
Just outside Ascalon City, presearing.Camera is behind Kael as is normally. Gwen runs up to Kael. (she should do this on her own)

Gwen: Hey Mister! Can you help me find my flute?

Camera zoomed in of Kael's face.

Kael: (to himself) There's something about that girl...

Camera on Gwen's face. Flash clips of Gwen's rampage at the end of that Beta Weekend. Camera then pans from her face downward to her feet and stops.

Kael: Oh, she's not wearing any shoes...

Camera now has the two at profile Kael on left, Gwen on right.

(To her. Kael uses /yes) You can count on me.

Gwen: Great because I just sent another guy out and he hasn't come back yet.

Kael: What?

Gwen: Yeah, I think he was killed by the skales or something...

Kael /doubletake

Kael: And you just...I...uh...you? I need to go do something!

Kael runs off towards river, camera switches to behind him. He arrives at the river to see Grunto's dead body surrounded by skales.

Kael: (/shoo) Ootidi! Ootidi! Filthy creatures!

Kael takes down the skale and rezes Grunto.

Grunto: Thank Balthezar you saved me! I was trying to get that girl's flute and they just kinda...uh...overtook me. That was worse than the time I had a dream of a monster coming out of the closet!

Scene flashes back to Grunto and a skale facing eachother. The camera is profile: Skale on left, Grunto on right.

Skale: Grunto, I'm gay.

Grunto: What?

Skale: I'm gay.

Grunto: Uh...you don't like me do you?

Scene flashes back to present.

That's all I got for now I have more to come, but tell me what you guys think so far.

TwilightOblivion · Sep 21, 2005, 03:29 AM // 03:29

i like the familyguy-esque flashback. I also like how you showed what emotes would be used. I just left thet up to the actors, figured they would make the right decision. Here, ill write the story, you tweak it (add more funny)and add necesarry emotes and camera stuff. You send it back to me, I go over it, If I like it, we send it to be videoized. sound fair?

Sai of Winter · Sep 21, 2005, 03:31 AM // 03:31

HAHAHA!! Man, that part about the Skale is funny.

Tur713 · Sep 21, 2005, 03:38 AM // 03:38

Quote:

Originally Posted by TwilightOblivion

i like the familyguy-esque flashback. I also like how you showed what emotes would be used. I just left thet up to the actors, figured they would make the right decision. Here, ill write the story, you tweak it (add more funny)and add necesarry emotes and camera stuff. You send it back to me, I go over it, If I like it, we send it to be videoized. sound fair?

Yeah, we'll send it back and forth for editing then. I'll tell you my e-mail adress via PM.

topdragon147 · Sep 21, 2005, 03:49 AM // 03:49

we need to find some way of having a meeting, it would help things go a lot faster. maybe someone could set up a website?

Draco Hunt · Sep 21, 2005, 03:59 AM // 03:59

Twilight and Tur nice scripts. Still think you guys need to work a little more on the humor because we are dependent on mostly the lines. I think if u guys work togheter it is al going to be alright. Looking forward to your final first script to film. If it is not to much trouble could you send it to my e-mail account(posted a few posts back) I would like to look at it and maybe give building critizizme.
O yeah and some emotes can be used in a difrent way like the violin emo can be used as a hug. experiment with the emo's.

Tur713 · Sep 21, 2005, 05:06 AM // 05:06

Yeah, I've been looking for new uses of the emotes...if you have any, tell me!

TwilightOblivion · Sep 21, 2005, 12:33 PM // 12:33

well, I had to set the basework and Tur, can you take the 3 episodes ive churned out already and edit them? that would be greatly appreciated

Draco Hunt · Sep 21, 2005, 01:46 PM // 13:46

Hope to see your next scripts soon

And other use for emotes wel just sit behind a wall type /boo enter. That makes a pretty funny combo

TwilightOblivion · Sep 21, 2005, 08:50 PM // 20:50

I just want EVERYONE to know that any ideas submitted to me will be taken into consideration to be used in the script. This includes situations, storylines, comedy, whatever. Just be specific, so that i can generalize it into the script if need be with relative ease

Draco Hunt · Sep 22, 2005, 12:16 AM // 00:16

I had this idea of the pre-sear guys going behind the wall and then trigger the effect of the seering by accidently doing something with the ritual place. Ill keep the rest to you but it would make some sense and still be funny if done right.

TwilightOblivion · Sep 22, 2005, 12:53 AM // 00:53

well, i think i ahve done all i can for now. I dont want to write anymore untill what i have already written is being used. Also Phantasy Star Online Episodes I&II for the Gamecube has just become free to play, so i wont be on GW much this weekend.

Tur713 · Sep 26, 2005, 07:58 AM // 07:58

Okay, just a couple of other things right now. First, I think the first season should be the presearing. And we shouldn't release any episodes until we have a couple under our belt and can figure out about how regularly we can realease them.